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Research and Planning: Level 3 15/20
Proficient work on scripting and storyboarding
Time management is good
Proficient organisation of actors, locations, costumes and props
Proficient research into similar products and a potential target audience.
There is a good level of care in the presentation of research and planning

To progress to level 4, make sure you have explained how your research impacted your decisions (for example in your audience profile posts, explain how you intend to address the potential target audience in your opening 2 minutes). More audience profiling (like for 'White Noise') is needed.

Production: Level 2 34/60
There is a basic level of ability in the use of the following:
Using titles appropriately according to institutional conventions
Controlled use of camera, attention to framing, variety of shot types and attention to mise-en-scene
Using editing so that meaning is apparent to the viewer

And a proficient level of ability in using sound with images and editing appropriately for the task.

To improve, consider using a wider variety of shot types and the costume of the sinister character. There is also a moment when Amber looks directly into the camera.

sinister character - Pam

This is a picture of my mum who played the sinister entity in my film. I thought she would be good for the part as she does well at acting as realistically as she can, and I just thought she looked the part.

Script

I didn't write a full script for my film as there wasn't much talking in it. The only talking I had was a poem that my mum read out off camera, that was supposed to be a ghostly voice. The poem was written by my mum's boyfriend, who was also supposed to do a voice but it never happened. Below is the poem:

 

Be very careful where you tread
Don’t trample on the graves of dead
You can’t see us
But we see you

Eternally watching all that you do
Bring us flowers
Pay your respects
To rest in peace is all we expect
Dishonour our memory
Or disturb where we lay
You’ll live to regret it
‘Till your dying day.